Sela Locke

Wordless I am becoming. Stop being so good, Nu. It makes me look frail and lame, and I no likey. HOWEVER, you're taking me down to Albertson's later, since it's ...

Mostly I said all I needed to in the first two chapters. Just stick by those and you'll be find, although I may add a few things later on if ...

Aye, aye, cap'n! But yes, I do believe this would be a good way to release your energy, and it is a perfectly alright for you to continue it - ...

I'm pretty darn sure 'tis opposite, but then why did Snoink want to talk to you? And being honest is no reason to get banned. I never said your story ...

Okay, I'm not really one for nitpicks, especially when the story has bigger, more urgent problems. So I will not nitpick, but try to address bigger probs. Now, within YWS, ...

Not bad, but it's really choppy, and not long enough to get a real feel for the place your trying to put the reader in. I mean, the problem with ...

Niiice! I'd rather not nit-pick, considering others hav mostly gotten it down, but I agree one hundred percent with Chern. An imagination that awesome really could go a long away. ...

I couldn't agree with Sorsha more. Xena, please don't even start trying to fix it - there really isn't anything to fix. Unless you want to go to the document ...

This was, without a doubt, the worst story I have ever read, YWS or anywhere else. It mixed all the wrong things, and included a guy named Jesus Christ who ...

The thing that bugged me most about this was that I really didn't like the MC. I actually hated her. I know she was in love with her husband, but ...

I think you're going a little bit too far with the whole 'completely, ridiculously random'ness. After a time, even the funniest random can get dumb. And you didn't even wait. ...

Yeah, it was really a complete random - thing. I think that it just helped me to get out some of my own energy in a way more productive than ...

Ooh, thanks! I'll go over those soon. =D Yes, I'm glad I did, since sometimes they do act younger - then - older. Like so. xD THANKSAGAIN -SELA

This is actually based on true and real happenings - the two kids Rose (13) and Ben (12) have had their names changed for privacy, and for the fact that ...

I know that this is two chapters in a row, but I couldn't leave y'all hanging! Enjoy. =D C H A P T E R T E N Delys snorted, ...